Some international companies are very powerful now and many people believe that it is a negative development. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your reasons and relevant examples.

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Some global corporates are immensely influential in the status quo and it is widely believed that
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is a disadvantageous enhancement. It can be
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seen that some of them have made use of the given power to manipulate
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and committing wrongdoings. There are piles of strong arguments to advocate
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point of view.
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of all, the more powerful the firms are, the easier
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them to be manipulative towards the public and viewers, followers. When reaching an
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international
scale of recognization, they must have had their own attorney crew, power to address the problems that might have negative impacts on their prestige.
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detrimental feedback on their products
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or the products' quality
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not assured, they would take
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advantage
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the news, local public to regain the consumers' reliability and market's position.
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, those companies might have more
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than the government and run the country behind
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is a detrimental improvement that might influence other national aspects
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as education. law, economy, to name but a few. If a country was governed by a
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party but not the government, they can straightforwardly slip through the regulations and be tolerant towards not only
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atrocious crimes. To be concise, I totally subscribe to the statement that if multinational corporates were too potent, that would have a harmful effect.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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