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Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#internet #books #air #tickets #groceries
In the present ,days each and every person is having a smartphone. Each and every smartphone has accessibility to many e-commerce apps. These apps or applications made human life simpler and convenient. Starting from daily household needs to
books
, tickets and groceries are easily available to buy on the
internet
. These are making the advantages of buying things on the
internet
 weigh more than the disadvantages. Each and every kind of genre
books
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book
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 are available on the
internet
. Without the need of visiting a
store
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 we can simply buy
books
 just by ordering through the
internet
. And in present days
books
 that are not
presant
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present
 in the store are sometimes present
in
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on
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 the
internet
.
For example
, when
i
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I
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 wanted to buy "wings of fire" which is an autobiography, I
could'nt
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couldn't
 find the
book
 in the
book
 stores nearby.
Then
 I searched for it through the
internet
 where I found and ordered it. I received the
book
 within a week.
This
 incident gave me a positive opinion on shopping online.
On the other
hand
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 we can
also
 buy or
book
 tickets online.
For example
, if we need to travel tomorrow and if there is no enough time to visit the station to buy the ticket, we can simply
book
 it online.
This
 not only saves time but
also
 provides us
the
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 convenience to buy tickets without travelling anywhere. The online things which we buy through the
internet
 can
also
 be exchanged or returned, which is one of the peoples favourite
feature
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features
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 provided in
internet
 shopping. These facilities are attracting people to shop online.
Therefore
, we can conclude that there are more advantages to shopping online than that of
the
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disadvantages which
is
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 making
the
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internet
 shopping more and more popular.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • wide selection
  • competitive prices
  • discounts
  • accessibility
  • global marketplace
  • availability
  • fraud
  • scams
  • lack of
  • physical interaction
  • personal experience
  • impersonal
  • customer service
  • delays
  • delivery
  • return process
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