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What are the reasons why many animal species are being endangered or extinct?

#species
Based on research results, loss of
habitat
 is the main reason why species become endangered . A loss of
habitat
 can occur because of many factors. The snowmelt, drought, global warming,...All the climate changes impact
on
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the
habitat
 where the animals live. If they are unable to adapt to these new environments, they can become endangered and
then
 extinct.
In addition
, the activities of humans can
also
 contribute to the loss of
habitat
. The forest is logged for housing, industry,...As the result, the animals lose their
habitat
, they have to move to new places which can be not suitable for them. In
other case
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, the animals don’t have anything to eat, they move to local areas and are hunted. We should take some actions to protect endangered species.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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