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When cars and cyclists use the same roads, there are often problems. Why is this the case? What are the solutions?

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In my country, when the living conditions are better and better nowadays, we can see more and more
cyclists
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 in the street.
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, when
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 and
cyclists
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 occupy the same roads, issues
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 arise
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. In my opinion,
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 is actually the result of bad urban planning and the solutions will be
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 discussed below.
To begin
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 with, roads are not wide enough for both
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 and cycles to run comfortably. They use the same roads, but they have different speeds. Some
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 try to ride as fast as possible on the crowded street carelessly.
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, car drivers need to wait for a while to pass through them safely. It sometimes leads to traffic jams.
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, some car drivers have a warped sense of priority, they shout at
cyclists
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 to move faster. In extreme situations, collisions may occur.
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, there is no rule for cycles but there are a lot of regular policies the
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 need to follow.
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, they will be fined.
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also
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 impacts the relationship between the two sides. To solve these problems, the government needs to have better city planning. In short term, one solution is to create separate tracks for bikes along with the existing streets like what we have for pedestrians. In long term, we should have more innovative ways with roundabouts, traffic lights, and bridges to create a seamless flow. In conclusion, a lot of problems occur when
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 and cycles use the same streets. But they can be fixed with the help of authorities.
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