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In today's competitive world, many families find it necessary for both parents go out to work. While some say the children in their families benefit from the additional income, others feel they lack support because of their parent’s absence. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own.

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 are highly significant for a teenager in today's era. some people believe that it is a need of
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 to do a job for
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 due to high inflation while others feel that it will affect their offspring's upbringing. In
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 essay, I will examine what are the reasons for
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 situations. Predominantly, Doing a job brings with it high income so that
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 can use it for their juvenile's better
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,
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, combined salary of their
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 helps to provide better education facilities, healthier lifestyle, different types of gadgets which could be used for better understanding of studies. Apart from
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, considering today's inflation condition to spend money for greater
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 the
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 need to do the job. The research,
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, teenagers whose
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 are working, are more intelligent and healthy than other youngsters.
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, watching their
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 working, the child becomes not only independent but
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 responsible.
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, despite some advantages of working
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 it
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 brings considerable drawbacks. Undoubtedly, parenting plays a vital role in a
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's development. Good parenting, indeed, is to support, guide and monitor your adolescent in each situation. If a
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 is in a bad friend circle and
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 don't know about it, it will adversely affect their
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's behaviour, as a consequence, a teenager might get into bad habits
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 as drinking alcohol, watching porn movies and smoking etc.
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, it is necessary for
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 to closely watch their
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's behaviour. In conclusion,
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 should balance their working and personal
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 and make sure that their daughter or son may not be in a bad friend circle.
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