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Some people like to spend their leisure time after work with co- workers while others prefer to keep their private life separate from their work life. Discuss both side and give your own opinions.

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Activities
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 after finishing
work
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, several of the
people
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 like to hang out and relax with colleagues;
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, some
people
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 prefer to keep their individual
life
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 disconnected from their occupation
life
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. In the following paragraph, both of these views will be discussed in detail before the conclusion is reached. On the one hand, many
employees
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 like to spend their unoccupied
time
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 after
work
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 with their fellow workers because most mercenaries usually clock out and leave an office at the same
time
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, so it is no wonder that these
employees
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 make schedules for some
activities
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 with their workmates after
work
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such
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 as getting a drink, going to dinner, playing the sport, or catching a movie.
Hence
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, these
activities
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 can easily sort
people
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’s attention into groups according to their liking. From my point of view,
this
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 leisurely
time
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 help evoke a strong relationship with workers, decrease tension-stress during working, and have a good effect on
employees
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 when they encounter obstacles or problems together at
work
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 because they can help each other.
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, some
people
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 prefer to keep their personal
life
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 separate from their
work
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life
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. Some workers prefer to be alone and do the activity alone,
someone
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 is a loner, some
people
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 are not single: they have a wife or a husband and children waiting at their house every day. As a consequence, some
employees
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 do not like to spend their leisure
time
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 with co-workers. In my opinion, I believe that those
people
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 like to spend their free
time
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 after
work
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 with their families, and they are happy with
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time
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 when they do the activity with
someone
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 whom they love.
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, someday they got tired from the atmosphere of the working was tense and
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 they took
time
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 off from the
work
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 environment is another good way to relieve stress. To summarize, spending one’s leisure
time
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 after the job is done is very important because of the present,
people
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 have increased stress from working;
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, these
people
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 should spend their free
time
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 with
someone
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 or something. I think either do
activities
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 with
someone
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 who is familiar or rests with their private
life
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 separate from co-workers are help them release tension
also
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.
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