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Some people argue that capital punishment is a brutal decision and should be abolished. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people have different views about the
death
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penalty
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, seeing it as a ruthless
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 that should be abolished.
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, I believe that the
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penalty
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 should remain because not only can it serve as a deterrent to serious crimes but it
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 means that taxpayers’
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 won’t be spent on taking care of the criminals for
life
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.
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capital punishment is a warning to those contemplating serious crimes as they may face the ultimate consequence. Obviously, people, including criminals, love their lives and are afraid to die.
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, without
such
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 a punishment, atrocious activities will only result in
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 in prison at most, which is much more acceptable to criminals;
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, in many countries, a
life
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 sentence may be reduced over time or, in some cases, be pardoned. Another reason for the continuation of the
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penalty
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 is that it costs less to terminate the
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 of a criminal than to prolong it indefinitely. To put into perspective, literally speaking, a
life
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 sentence or one with significantly long jail time,
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 as 80 or 100 years, means that the state will have to spend taxpayers’
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 to care for the convict for
life
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. To
further
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 illustrate, the amount of
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 necessary to sustain a criminal for
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 includes the costs of food, medical care, clothing, and facility maintenance. It is obvious that the state can use
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money
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 to improve the quality of
life
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 of the general public
instead
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.
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, many convicts quickly return to their
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 of crime and repeat the cycle soon after being released, wasting more tax
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 in the process. In conclusion, though it may appear to be a harsh and inhumane act, which some view as a cruelty that should be discontinued, I would strongly argue that the cancellation of the
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penalty
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 will surely make matters worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • capital punishment
  • deterrent
  • irreversible
  • wrongful conviction
  • moral implications
  • life imprisonment
  • societal impact
  • abolition
  • justice system
  • rehabilitation
  • ethical considerations
  • humanitarian perspectives
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