Recent figures show an increase in violent crime among youngsters under the age of 18. Some psychologists claim that the basic reason for this is that children these days are not getting the social and emotional learning they need from parents and teachers. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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scenario .

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, it is noticed that youngsters are more indulge in immoral deeds due to lack of

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their basic and luxuries needs as

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schedule they do not have much time to focus on their offspring to teach moral values. owing to

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, children become careless and chose bad companies of their friends.

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immoral conducts

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have a good step toward the success of children .

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taught moral and social

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academic education according to the salary they earn

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values so,students neglect these values to

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regard , 'The Times' report that 60%of the school children are addicted to drugs because of the lack of knowledge about bad results In conclusion, it can be said that owing to the working era and personal status

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