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Nowadays, more and more foreign students are going to English-Speaking countries to learn the “international” language – English. It is undoubtedly true that studying English in an English-speaking country is the best way, but it is not the only way to learn it.

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The modern society without learning the
English
language
 students cannot do anything in the
future
world
. Because
English
 becomes a more popular and global
language
 in the
world
. Some people were arguing, subtends needed to learn
English
 as a
second
 option, while others were arguing, educating a foreign
language
 would put the native
language
 at risk.
This
 essay will explore both sides of the argument and
finally
 express my view on that.
First
 of all, these days studying
English
 is a most important thing rather than in earlier decades. In the
,
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world
 without ,it we cannot move forward through
future
 education or career path.
For instance
, consider with our country many companies run their business through international market, while their all document, the presentation and interviews depend on the way of their talking and capacity. Apart from that, without knowing these major requirements job seekers could not find appropriate job opportunities in the
future
. If you prefer to learn that, it has numbers of benefits can be pinpointed,
such
 as the students can get their highest studies through international universities, easy to cope with global and find proper employment, it helps to make a relationship in the foreign environment.
On the other hand
, the native tongue and other traditional subject
helps
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 to the students identify in our society, historical diversities, cultural background and many more.
However
,
in
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the present culture depend on the
English
. Plenty of the nations use
this
 as their common tongue. In
conclude
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, I support
this
first
 opinion, I entirely agree with that. As a human begins, we have to adhere with the adaptation and various situation, challenges. Everyone should educate in the upcoming
world
, while it will
beneficial
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 in the
future
 life.
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