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some people believe that loss of animals and plants as major environmental issue while others think that there are other major environmental problems. what is your opinion?

#people #loss #animals #plants
The given topic is highly controversial .
However
 , if a glance is taken at the pros and cons of
this
 aspect , It is irrefutable to say that , it is thought by many
people
 that loss of animals and plants
a
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major environmental problem. So , In my ideology , I am in consummate accord with the
first
 statements and I hereby give the following arguments to support myself and
also
 give
the
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solve
this
 issue. Commencing with a
first
 and foremost point is that list of my knowledge
firstly
 , Nowadays , pollution is increasing
day
 by
day
 because
people
 are using more own vehicles So , it creates more pollution and
also
 it affects to the environment So that's why
people
 are losing animals and birds .
In addition
 to
this
 , today , every cities and village have phone networks towers and it sends higher frequency So ,
this
 effect animals and birds . Apart from
this
 , Population is increasing
day
 by
day
 So ,
people
 are cutting plants for a living and they are making houses that places and some
people
 open more industry that places So ,
this
 type of issues affect on the environment .
Moreover
 ,as every lock has a key so ,
this
 complication can be stemmed out
Firstly
 ,
People
 should planting more trees and
also
 they should use governments transport . Government should take action against the send higher frequency towers So ,
this
 problem can be handled on time and they can not face any issues .In Future . To recapitulate ,it can not be denied that
this
 problem can be very well and effectively handled with the joint and collaborative efforts of the Governments and society on the whole .
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