Some people believe that a great difference in age between people and children is more beneficial. Do you think the advantages of a greater difference in age between them outweigh the disadvantages?

It is generally believed by one part of our community that, higher the gap between multiple age groups, the better it will be for society. I
also
support
this
statement and opine that
this
difference surely has higher benefits rather than its side effects.
Firstly
, we will explain the pros in the upcoming paragraph and
secondly
, we will elaborate on how the advantages outweigh the disadvantages in the
second
passage.
To begin
with, kids learn everything from their elder family members either by observing their actions or by adhering to their advice. A great gap amongst two generations might provide the teenagers matured learnings through guardian's life experiences.
Additionally
, it creates a sense of respect as well as fear in youth if their near ones are aged. To illustrate, my cousin is 12 years elder than me, because of that I listen plus implement his every suggestion, whereas I don't care about my real brother's opinions, as he is just 2 years elder than me.
Thus
, it is evident that it is the need of the era to have supervision of matured parents or adults for the younger generation.
On the other hand
, in
this
revolutionary era, youngsters are highly inspired by the western culture which they see over the internet,
consequently
, they adopt a casual approach towards relationships with their guardians and considers them of their youth group after reaching the old age of 15. The main reason for
this
is that adults marry nowadays at a younger life and by the time their kids attain maturity of 15, they are just 37. There needs to be at least a 3-decade gap between both generations.
For example
,
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • parenting
  • financial security
  • emotional maturity
  • life experience
  • extracurricular opportunities
  • career establishment
  • flexibility
  • generation gap
  • energy levels
  • health complications
  • optimal
  • stable environment
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