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It is often said that “when in Rome, do as the Romans do”. Do you think people should adapt and accept the culture of the country they are visiting? Do you think it is possible to learn a culture without learning the language?

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As can be seen, some
people
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 believe the word “when in Rome, do as the Romans do”. In my opinion, it is very important for
people
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 to adapt and accept the
culture
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 of the
country
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 they are living in. In my opinion, I think that it is impossible for
people
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 to learn civilization without learning the
language
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.
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 of all, it is important for
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 learners to understand something about the
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. It is noticeable that many immigrants usually learn many cultures from the countries they stayed in by understanding the
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 of that
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.
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, my cousin who moved to stay in American said that it is very important to study English in order to adapt herself to the American's
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. Another point of view is that
people
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 who tried to accept themselves to the
country
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 they are visiting will be able to have a better quality of life. When
people
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 adapt to the local
culture
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 of a
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, it shows their respect towards that civilization and the
people
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.
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 makes them more acceptable than those who do not among the
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 in that
country
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.
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, my uncle who moved to China told me that showing respect for the countries we visit will make the
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 of that
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 especially fond of us. In conclusion, respecting the foreigner's traditions while visiting their territory is a necessity for a successful visit.
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,
language
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, as well as cultural awareness, is considered a must for any humankind who is visiting a new
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.
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