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Some people believe that air travel should be restricted because it causes serious pollution and will use up the world’s resources. Do you agree or disagree?

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In today's
world
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,
air
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travel
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 plays a very important role in our society and as well as in boosting
economy
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. The opportunities provided by it are countless. It has immensely helped to modernise the
world
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 and
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 enables us to reach new extremities in life. Regardless
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few adverse effects on the environment due to aviation, I completely disagree with limiting
air
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travel
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 because of that reason.
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, aviation has vastly dwindled the distance between
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 nations. With its aid,
people
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 can now
travel
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 to any part of the
world
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 for work, to meet family or friends or for vacation. To illustrate, for a large proportion it is no means of luxury rather a way to accomplish jobs and goals. Disrupting it can significantly affect the economic condition of the
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. And
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 because it provides a lot of job opportunities for
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 and aids in decreasing poverty.
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, if
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travel
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 is limited
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 a lot of
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 will lose their jobs. Folks
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 as pilots,
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 hostesses, customer service, food suppliers, cleaners and many other
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 will be unemployed.
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, the continuity of it is necessary.
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, aeronautics has a vast contribution
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 boosting international trade. It promotes cross-cultural activities.
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, because of
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 folks can go anywhere anytime.
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, they get a chance to meet many new
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 and learn about their cultures and languages. It enlightens them with knowledge and
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 their horizons. In the past, travelling would take days but now humans can do it in a matter of few hours with the help of aeronautics.
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, tourism plays a vital role in building economics and ward off the vicious problem of hunger from the
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. To conclude, I hold the view that because of a few unpleasant effects on the environment aviation should not be curtailed rather alternative eco-friendly methods should be adopted like
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 of bio-fuel etc. Because aeronautics is extremely beneficial for the
world
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.
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