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Some educationalist think that international exchange visit will benefit teenagers at the school. To what extent do advantages outweight the disadvantages.

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Nowadays, so many schools start programs for international students and it gives them an opportunity to interact with other countries students. Some experts think
that is
 beneficial for youth. In
this
 essay, we discuss their advantage outweigh the disadvantage.
To begin
 with, one of the benefits of an international exchange visit is that you have a chance to broadens your horizons. I mean you have a chance to explore new culture and a new lifestyle . You can learn new languages and interact with new cultures.
For example
, According to the report, if you live in France you can learn French 60 per cent faster than in your own country because you have to communicate everything in French.
Secondly
, developed countries have a better education system so that juveniles learn something new, which aid them for their future study.
Also
 if they want to study abroad it helps to evaluate the pro and cons of the decision.
Thirdly
, It boosts your confidence because of the exposure.
For example
, according to the Times, children, who visit a foreign country they are more confident about their future and take better decision for their life.
On the other hand
, one of the drawbacks is homesickness. Generally, adolescents cannot cope up with the language barrier and feel homesick.
For instance
, Many students feel alone because they don't have friends and they can't communicate with their mates owing to the language barrier that makes them frustrating.
Moreover
, these visits are very expensive for some parents and they are unable to afford these expenses.
For instance
, in India 40% of people can't fulfil their basic education so, it is impossible for them to afford these kinds of travel. In conclusion, though there are quite a number of factors
which
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 should not encourage international exchange visits, I believe the benefits of personal growth eventually outweigh any negatives
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Educationalist
  • International exchange visit
  • Intercultural understanding
  • Language acquisition
  • Personal growth
  • Global awareness
  • International relationships
  • Culture shock
  • Global citizens
  • Support systems
  • Inclusive
  • Scholarships
  • Cultural differences
  • Homesickness
  • Educational institutions
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