Some people say the main way to be happy in life is to have a lot of money. How might having a lot of money make people happy? What other things in life can make people happy? (Give reasons for your answers and include any relewant examples from your own knowledge or experience.)

Considered by many, a lot of
money
make people
life
much happier but others claim that
money
is just a resource and can not make our
life
happy due to many
things
are existed is the world that can lead to positive emotions.
Firstly
, the quote “
Money
can not lead to happy” is actual, but the population always forget about it. In the current age population be tend to have a high income and sometimes forget about basic
things
like family, friends or a hobby and try to earn how much more
money
. Healthy parents, a beautiful wife who helps and supports in many cases, good friends these basic
things
make me feel happy.
For instance
: I have a friend who has 5 kids but he has an average income, his wife does not work,
also
he rents an appartment but he is happy.
Secondly
, people are doomed and eventually a lot of
money
have no sense. I am convinced that plenty of
money
spoil human’s
life
.
For instance
: my relative from German wants to be a millionaire and he cuts all ties with relatives, from my point of view
this
is the best example what
money
can do with an individual. I have already had my own accomodation, an average salary, my hobby that I can use
such
as passive income and I am pretty satisfied. In a nutshell, many people forget about basic necessary
things
, but I am inclined to believe stable and happy
life
is the best and it has many pros rather than cons.
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  • Wealth
  • Prosperity
  • Affluence
  • Financial security
  • Financial freedom
  • Well-being
  • Quality of life
  • Hobbies and interests
  • Travel and exploration
  • Achievement
  • Success
  • Generosity
  • Compassion
  • Empathy
  • Supportive relationships
  • Personal development
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