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Band 4.5

Some people think that to learn a second language well it is necessary to live in the country where that language is spoken.What is your opinion about this?

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The diagram provides information about geothermal
power
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, one of the electricity generating methods in the world and how is
this
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 system works. Overall, there is a cold
water
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 tank, which holds the
water
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 as a main source of
power
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 generating liquid. The hot
water
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 turns into steam and is collected into the condenser, which is used as a fuel to turn the turbine to generate
power
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. Successfully created
power
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 will distribute through the main grid to household and commercial sectors.
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 of all, the cold
water
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 pumped 4.5KM through the tunnel to the injection well, which is another end open to the naturally hot rocks.
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 the steamed up
water
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 direct to the production well.
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, the steamed
water
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 has flown into the condenser, which is powered by the hot
water
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 pump.
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, the steam inside the condenser pushed through the narrow tube to the generator compartment, where is the
power
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 generation processes began. The rotation turbine produced the movement to the generator to create electricity. The final product will fulfil the requirement in the country.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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