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Restricting air travel is the only way to prevent air pollution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#air #travel #pollution
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In recent years, there has been a significant increase in various types of
pollutions
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pollution
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. One of them is
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pollution
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. Some believe that we can only prevent it by restricting
air
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travel
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. In my opinion, limiting it is not entirely effective in today's modern world.
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travel
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, because nowadays, travelling by
air
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 has become dramatically inexpensive.
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, people can save many hours of
travel
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 if they use flights as a mode of transport.
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this
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, more and more travellers have started preferring
air
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travel
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 these days. For
an
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apply
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instance, in the US,
delta airlines
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Delta Airlines
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 increased the frequency of their flights by ten per cent in the
last
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 year.
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, some think that
this
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 is the only way to solve the issue of
air
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pollution
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.
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, we might consider other factors like vehicles on the ground,
chemical
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and chemical
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 factories which are more prominent for
air
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pollution
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. Because of the huge population around the world, people use more cars, buses,
trains
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and trains
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 for their transportation.
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, they are likely to release carbon dioxide gas which is inferred as one of the major sources of polluting
air
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. To illustrate, recent research shows that
air
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pollution
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 has jumped from five to ten per cent in the past four years
due to
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 carbon dioxide all around the globe.
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, ground vehicles should not be ignored when choosing the sources of
air
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pollution
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. In conclusion,
this
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argued
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 why travelling by
air
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 can not be the only cause to prevent
pollution
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 in the
air
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. In my opinion, the government and we, as a society should limit both
air
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 and ground
travel
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 to a certain extent.
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, some strict laws might be imposed to handle the issue of
pollution
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 in case of its sudden rise.
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