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Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion.

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It is thought that educating a child from their own comfort is best for their development whereas other groups of people believe that going to school is a valuable asset for their growth emotionally and friendly. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall explain the advantages of both.
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 of all, there are many playful methods which are invented and can be implemented for
children
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 at their home with parents devoting some of their time in helping their's child education.
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, having a large family could develop the emotions of
children
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 and
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 families have a myriad of
children
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 in their home which develops their friendly nature.
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, technological advancement helped prompt education online where everything is found on the internet
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 developments in society is beneficial for
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. As we can say that, schooling is the
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 step where
children
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 are experiencing an outer world of outlook it exposes them to strangers who become friends and
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 to a healthy competitive environment. In the schools, institution allots a variety of teachers particularly to a group of
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.
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, education is an important part of a country to develop economically and scientifically. Scientific innovations can mostly be done in institutions in the presence of teachers. I would introduce an example, recently in a new paper ,article there has been
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 conducted on a myriad of
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 where it shows
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 who to schooling have more advantageous benefits compared with
children
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 at home. To recapitulate, each one of them has its own advantages in the perspectives of a varied group of people.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Tailored learning
  • peer pressure
  • flexibility
  • instill values
  • socialization
  • communication skills
  • specialized facilities
  • extracurricular activities
  • diversity
  • structured environment
  • customized education
  • well-rounded education
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