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Recently, abortion increases rapidly and becomes a controversial topic. Some people suppose that abortion should be legal while others are against it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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These days,
abortion
 is the topic of discussion in several countries since it raises speedily from the past. Some believe
abortion
 should legalize because some pregnant ladies were sexually harassed by the criminal.
However
, others argue it should be illegal because there are various ways to prevent
pregnancy
. In my opinion, it should be legal since it can protect the problem related to the orphans. On the one hand, termination of
pregnancy
 should legalize, due to sexual harassment. The crime has increased,
as a result
 of it, some women who are not willing to pregnant would like to end of child's life.
For example
, my country has sexual crimes almost every day. A large number of women call out, to legalize
abortion
 because they think laddies who face the sexual issue should be able to commit
abortion
.
On the other hand
, they disagree with it because preventing
pregnancy
 has several methods to commit except for
abortion
. They suggest people should use a condom to protect themselves. The report from AEC university,
for instance
, represents the best way to decrease
pregnancy
 is using a condom. It does not only use to prevent
pregnancy
, but it
also
 uses to protect themselves from HIV. From my point of view, I agree with the side which supports
abortion
 to be legal because it can solve the trouble of orphans. Namely, numerous teenagers give birth to their children without being will,
therefore
 several kids are abandon by their parents. To solve
this
 trouble, the government should permit
abortion
 to legalize. In conclusion, some people think
abortion
 should be legal because it is a result of sexual harassment,
nevertheless
, others believe it should be illegal because to prevent
pregnancy
 has several methods. In my view, it should legalize to solve the issue of orphans.
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