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Everyday, millions of tons of food are wasted all over the world. Why do you think it is happening and how can we resolve the problem?

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While thousands of people worldwide are dying of hunger every day, developed countries of
modern
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 world waste millions of tons of
food
 on a daily basis. In
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 I would like to share my opinion about
this
 issue and propose a resolution for
this
 problem.
To begin
 with, fast-
food
restaurants
 offering cheap meals are at almost every corner. Many of these
restaurants
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all
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you
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can eat options
,
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 or
extra large
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 menus which are impossible to eat, huge portions of these meals end up in the dumpster. We can observe the same phenomenon in most
of
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the
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supermarkets. It has been proven, that an ordinary customer prefers to buy larger packings for
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 price even when they know, they will not be able to eat the whole pack. The
food
 research which was
contudcted
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conducted
 10 years ago in the USA showed, that yearly leftovers of an average American family would provide enough
food
 for
family
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 of five living in Africa. The solution is right in front of us. It is understandable, that companies will not agree to give up the profit they make, but in my opinion better marketing strategies might help to reduce
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food
 waste globally.
For instance
, some all you can eat
restaurants
 in Prague offer their leftovers with
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% discount after 8 pm which is a great deal for those, who are in
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financial need. I
also
 believe, that people
in general
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 should buy only as much
food
, as they are able to eat. To conclude, I think that the issue of ordering or buying more
food
 that we are able to consume is something we need to work on. And while doing so, we can
also
 support
restaurants
 and organizations which try to save
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food
 for homeless people etc.
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