The high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising but not the real need of the society where such products are sold. Do you agree or disagree?

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Successful

sports

professionals can earn a great deal more money than

people

in other important professions. Some

people

think

this

is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Being a successful

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person

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take

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time

.Brighter athletes

professional

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can earn

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to other most important

individuals

.Few masses believe that it is fully justified

on the other hand

people

believe it is

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not-fair

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.In my honest

opinion

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aspects shall be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs. Let discuss in details there are multifarious factors successful athlete get a great amount of deal.The

first

and

formest

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is,they spend more hours and hours

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pracirce

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practice

and finding

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result

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Simalarly

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,during the

practice

session they face

lot

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of problems ,

such

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many types of injurious during the

practice

field and during that have a more problem to happen serious injury.

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athlete

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lot

to perform

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international games

for instance

olympic

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, Olympic held on after 6

year

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at a one

time

and

sports

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sportsperson

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person

performance

time

in Olympic only 4to10

minute

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so only for that performance they

practice

lot

this

hard work and sacrifices get

great

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deal.

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time

sports

individuals

spend

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of months without their family

member

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impace

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impact

impacts

also

in their personal life. On the different side, some reasons it is unfair to pay more for

sports

person

.The primary factor is, in today’s era in all field

napotism

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nepotism

are

rocketup

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rocket up

at day by day , so many

time

the

people

having a good talent they are

are

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not getting a similar platform so owing to

this

a negative image in all individual mind as considered.What is more,some

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due to some personal issue good talented

individuals

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right platform ,

such

as many

person

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are not belong

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good family so they

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manage their fees of professional institutes and being a good

sports

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sportsperson

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person

want to manage proper physical diet so some

time

this

also

lacking. To conclude,it’s very important to

individuals

get paid

off

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their hard work.

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if in another field a

person

doing great snd they put their all effort so, it’s

also

important they

also

get

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amount of money.

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The high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising but not the real need of the society where such products are sold. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some people believe that it is wrong to keep animals in zoo while others think that zoo are both entertainment and fun, discuss both the views and give Ur opinions.

Plastic bags, plastic bottles and plastic packaging are bad for the environment. What damage does plastic do to the environment ? What can be done by individuals and government to solve this problem ?

the charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did no go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.