The high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising but not the real need of the society where such products are sold. Do you agree or disagree?
Successful
sports
professionals can earn a great deal more money than people
in other important professions. Some people
think this
is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Being a successful sorts
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sports
person
take Change preposition
of person
lot
of Change the article
a lot
time
.Brighter athletes professional
can earn Fix the agreement mistake
professionals
superior
amount of money as Add an article
the superior
a superior
compare
to other most important Change the form of the verb
compared
individuals
.Few masses believe that it is fully justified on the other hand
people
believe it is Correct your spelling
not fair
not-fair
.In my honest Correct your spelling
not fair
opinion
I am inclined towards the former view but both Add a comma
,opinion
the
aspects shall be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs.
Let discuss in details there are multifarious factors successful athlete get a great amount of deal.The Correct article usage
apply
first
and formest
is,they spend more hours and hours Correct your spelling
foremost
to take
more Change the verb form
taking
pracirce
and finding Correct your spelling
practice
satisfied
Replace the word
satisfactory
result
.Fix the agreement mistake
results
Simalarly
,during the Correct your spelling
Similarly
practice
session they face lot
of problems ,Change the article
a lot
such
as,
many types of injurious during the Remove the comma
apply
practice
field and during that have a more problem to happen serious injury. Moreover
,all athlete
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athletes
practice
a lot
to perform on
international games Change preposition
in
for instance
olympic
, Olympic held on after 6 Change the capitalization
Olympic
year
at a one Change to a plural noun
years
time
and sports
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sportsperson
person
performance time
in Olympic only 4to10 minute
so only for that performance they Fix the agreement mistake
minutes
practice
a lot
so this
hard work and sacrifices get great
deal.Change the article
a great
Furthermore
,many time
sports
individuals
spend lot
of months without their family Change the article
a lot
member
it Fix the agreement mistake
members
impace
Correct your spelling
impact
impacts
also
in their personal life.
On the different side, some reasons it is unfair to pay more for sports
person
.The primary factor is, in today’s era in all field napotism
are Correct your spelling
nepotism
rocketup
at day by day , so many Correct your spelling
rocket up
time
the people
having a good talent they are are
not getting a similar platform so owing to Remove the redundancy
apply
this
a negative image in all individual mind as considered.What is more,some time
due to some personal issue good talented individuals
are not get
right platform ,Change the verb form
do not get
such
as many person
Change to a plural noun
people
are not belong
good family so they Change the verb form
does not belong
not
manage their fees of professional institutes and being a good Add a missing verb
do not
sports
Correct your spelling
sportsperson
person
want to manage proper physical diet so some time
this
is also
lacking.
To conclude,it’s very important to individuals
get paid off
their hard work.Change preposition
for
However
if in another field a person
doing great snd they put their all effort so, it’s also
important they also
get good
amount of money.Add an article
a good
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