Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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. Brighter athletes
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can earn
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amount of money as
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to other most important
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. Few masses believe that it is fully justified
on the other hand
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people believe it is
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not-fair
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I am inclined towards the former view but both
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aspects shall be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs. Let discuss in details there are multifarious factors successful athlete get a great amount of deal.The
first
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and
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is,they spend more hours and hours
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and finding
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result
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,during the
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session they face
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lot
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of problems ,
such
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as
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many types of injurious during the
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field and during that have a more problem to happen serious injury.
Moreover
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practice
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to perform
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international games
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, Olympic held on after 6
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at a one
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sports
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performance
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in Olympic only 4to10
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so only for that performance they
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hard work and sacrifices get
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individuals
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of months without their family
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in their personal life. On the different side, some reasons it is unfair to pay more for
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.The primary factor is, in today’s era in all field
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the people having a good talent they are
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due to some personal issue good talented
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manage their fees of professional institutes and being a good
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sports
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want to manage proper physical diet so some
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lacking. To conclude,it’s very important to
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get paid
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if in another field a
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial remuneration
  • exceptional
  • merit
  • talent
  • demand
  • entertainment value
  • career span
  • physical demands
  • justified
  • unfair
  • criticism
  • income inequality
  • societal priorities
  • sportsmanship
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