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These days many people live or work overseas in a different country than they were born in. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this and then give your own opinion.

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In recent
year
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,
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cost
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 of living has become a major challenge people face.
this
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 has made the increase of
persons
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to
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migrate from one
country
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 to another in search of greener pastures.
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Also
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 so many
persons
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believe
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belive
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believe
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 that
traveling
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travelling
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 overseas is the best option for better growth of income and survival. Below are the
followig
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following
 reasons or advantages while most
persons
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 move from one
country
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 and another for
setllement
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settlement
 and work
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, you will agree with me that,
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example
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 in
nigeria
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Nigeria
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 the
cost
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 of living is very high
compaired
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compared
 to the income received from their
work place
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workplace
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,
therefore
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this
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 has contributed to the fact that majority of the people born in
nigeria
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Nigeria
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 prefers to travel outside the
country
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 for a better job and pay. these days
alot
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a lot
 of
persons
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 can hardly feed and afford a better
accomodation
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accommodation
 and live a better life.
secondly
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, another advantage is the fact that the value of
nigerian
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Nigerian
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 currency is so poor,
compaired
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compared
 to that of the united states.The ratio has a very big gap without
comparisim
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comparison
.
for
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example
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 when you purchase an
iteam
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item
 from
oversea
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overseas
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 it is cheaper than buying it in
nigeria
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Nigeria
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 outside the
cost
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 of
shiping
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shipping
 it. For the disadvantage, you will
totaly
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totally
 agree with me that most foods which you could easily get
in
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at
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 a low
cost
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 while in
african
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African
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 are very high in
cost
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 and can not get them handy, it is very difficult to get them, Another disadvantage is the climate, the weather outside the
country
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 is always very cold, and lots of
persons
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 that
has
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have
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migratted
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migrated
 finds it very hard to adapt
in
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to
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 their new
enviroment
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environment
. In conclusion, despite the
disadvantages
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,disadvantages
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 the advantages
takes
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take
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 a better place than the disadvantages. movement from one
country
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 to another is best because it helps us save
have
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to have
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 a better place to work and live right.
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