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People believe that they should be able to keep all the money they earn and should not pay tax to the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is certainly understandable that most
of
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people wish to be able to keep all of the money they earn than pay
tax
 to the
state
.
However
, in
fact
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 without
tax
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 a
state
 cannot develop well. As for now I totally disagree with
such
 an idea even though I
also
 hope for
such
 an ideal idea.
Firstly
, it must be put in mind that one of the biggest incomes of a
state
 is from
tax
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taxes
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 paid by the citizens. Most of the states rely much on
tax
,
for
instance
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is
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 Indonesia. Around 60 to 70 per cent of their annual income is from
tax
. So, could you imagine how would it be for Indonesia if all of the people of Indonesia refuse to pay
tax
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 and prefer to keep all the money for themselves? I guess the
state
 might develop very slow or not develop at all.
Secondly
, as all of us might have known that the concept of the
tax
 we paid is by us, from us and for us, which means that the
tax
 we paid will be used by the
government
 to fund the project made for us.
For instance
, to build road, toll, bridge so we have access for our car. Essentially,
such
tax
 will be used to develop the
state
 and for the sake of the citizen themselves. Without
such
 toll, road or bridge we cannot use our car to travel to a remote area.
Thirdly
, the
tax
 is
also
 used for paying the operational of the
government
,
for
instance
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 to pay the salary of the governments and the officials, build governments’
building
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, pay monthly electricity and water bill. Without
tax
 our
government
 might not operate well, lack workers or officials. Based on the abovementioned, I do believe that it is our responsibility as the citizen to give return to the
state
 as we have been living in the land of the
state
 by paying the
tax
.
Therefore
, as for now I totally disagree with the idea that people should keep all of the money they earn than paying
tax
. Regardless, I
also
 hope the
government
 could find a formula to be more independent.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • contribute
  • welfare
  • public services
  • progressive taxation
  • distribution of wealth
  • civic duty
  • social cohesion
  • tax evasion
  • economic disparities
  • social unrest
  • individual rights
  • societal responsibilities
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