In the modern world,it is no longer necessary to use animals for food or use animals products for instance,clothing and medicines .To what extent do you agree or disagree?

As it is widely believed that God has invested the power in human beings to look after wildlife.I agree with the fact that it is our duty to protect and not to hunt
creature
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for food, apparel or testing in laboratories.In
this
ever-changing world, everything has its substitute same goes for leather that we get from reptile skins and dairy items that mammals produce. In the forthcoming ,paragraph I shall explain my viewpoint briefly.
To begin
with, homosapients need protein and many other nutrients to be in a healthy state that was only available in
animals
centuries ago,due to
this
caveman
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used to hunt
animals
for food. ,
However
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in today's ,world everything is replaceable thanks to agriculture and
such
nutrients can be found in pulses and other vegetables.
For example
, chickpea and beans have a similar amount of nutrients is present in a chicken.
Similarly
, Almond milk is used as a replacement for cow milk and contains the same amount of calcium.
Thus
, the need for poultry farming is not required in these times.
Furthermore
,there are many sympathetic individuals and social bodies which are against animal abuse and fight for their rescue.Recently,it was trending on the news when two brothers created
leather
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handbag using a cactus plant eliminating the risk of killing reptiles for purses,shoes and jackets.
Secondly
, many pharma companies have opted for cruelty-free testing and switched to plant-based testing. In conclusion, there are different products available for each and every requirement we receive from
animals
therefore
,I agree that we do not have to kill
animals
for our own selfish needs.
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