Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold.

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  • consumer behavior
  • perceived need
  • lifestyle aspirations
  • brand image
  • prestige
  • psychological techniques
  • scarcity
  • social proof
  • celebrity endorsements
  • technological advancements
  • product innovations
  • emerging consumer needs
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