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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

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Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold.

Fully explain your ideas

Some people think that the government should increase tax on unhealthy food to encourage people to start eating healthy. Do you agree or disagree?

Some experts believe that when a country is already rich, any additional increase in economic wealth does not make its citizens any more satisfied. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that children learn better when they are placed in classes with children of similar academic abilities. Others think that children learn better when they are in classes with children representing a diverse range of abilities. Discuss both views and give your opinion.