Some people believe that no one should be allowed to continue working after age 65. However, others say there should not be a limitation on age and anyone should be allowed to work regardless of their age. Discuss both views, and give your opinion and include relevant examples.

It is considered by some that after reaching
age
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the age
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of 65,
worker
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the worker
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should be stopped from working, while there are others who think that there should no policy that limit
people
to work regarding their
age
. In my opinion, I believe that
age
limitation is needed mostly
ini
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in
public
company
sector
, while
people
who
works
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work
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in
private
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a private
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company
can get more flexible limitation. On the one hand, many think that after reaching
certain
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a certain
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age
people
tend to lose their passion and
agilitiy
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agility
ability
,
therefore
strict policy should be imposed to ensure maximum public
service
of a
company
.
For instance
, one role of
government
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a government
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company
is to bring
a
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apply
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good
service
to
public
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the public
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. A line of young and
entusiasthic
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enthusiastic
empoyee
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employee
in government
company
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companies
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is one way to enable that great
service
.
On the other hand
,
old
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the old
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age
restriction is not needed since an experienced
employee
can be become an
upperhand
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upper hand
for a
company
, according to some.
In other words
, an
employee
that already working
since
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for
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a long time can become an
unvaluable
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invaluable
asset for a
company
, especially in
private
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the private
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sector
where that
employee
know exactly how to maximize profit from the many tricks and tips he/she
already
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has already
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through.
For instance
, in doing
bussiness
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business
, when a
company
need to negotiate, an experienced
employee
can
trully
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truly
shine, since negotiating emphasized to
way
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the way
a way
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of thinking based on experience
instead
of
phisical
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physical
ability.
Finally
, in my opinion, the
decison
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decision
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of weather
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whether
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weather
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whether
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age
limitation should be
consideration
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a consideration
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or not
is
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it
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really should be based on the situation of the
company
. For
an public
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public sector companies
a public sector company
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sector
companies
for
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,for
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example,
service
is their best interest.
Therefore
, putting maximum
age
for the
worker
is in line with the
company
target.
In contrast
, for
private
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the private
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sector
which
pursue
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profit, it is better for them to keep rely on
experienced
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an experienced
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workforce in order to take advantage of their experiences. A long time
worker
can easily know how to reach their target in the most effective and efficient way. In conclusion, having an over 65 of
age
as a
worker
can
be bring
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bring
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abundance
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an abundance
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of
benefit
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benefits
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for a
company
that looking for good income that cannot be achieved with
inexperienced
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an inexperienced
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workforce.
Conversely
,
people
with a lot of energy and passion are really suitable for public
sector
area organizations to enable them
bring
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excellent
service
.
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