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Some people say that advertisement targeting children may have negative effects on them, and suggest banning such advertisement as a solution. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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It is often argued that marketing strategies whose main target are
children
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 as those can negatively impact them. I highly agree with that position. That type of advertisement
influnce
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influence
influences
 and encourage
kids
 to become compulsive consumers, and
also
, can cause
psyochological
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psychological
prombles
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problems
 in some of them. The foremost purpose of advertisements is to influence the desire of buying, in young
kids
,
this
 can develop a culture of consumption that later can be very difficult to control. It is not uncommon to see parents expending considerable amounts of money to satisfy the demands of their little ones. Most of these
children
 grow up thinking that
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 need and have to get the items that the market dictates and that in the long run can develop a compulsive
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 that would normally end in a financial failure. Morden parents have to
redocarate
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redecorate
relocate
 their
children
 bedrooms every summer or each time Disney release a new massive movie
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campaign
. But now
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 look at the less privileged
kids
 whose parents cannot keep up with the
consumpiton
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consumption
 society demands, not being able to have these fashionable items and being exposed to all those marketing inputs generate a feeling of inadequacy and can significantly affect their
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self-esteem
 and their confidence by feeling inferior or even worse not worthy. These sentiments are proven to affect
children
's ability to
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interact
 with other
kids
 and negatively shape their
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personalities
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 forever. A recent study showed that an important percentage of the
kids
 that are reluctant to go back to school after
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Christmas
 holidays, simply do
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 want to go because they did not get their dream costly present
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other
 classmates.
Children
 should be able to grow up free from all sorts of marketing influences that could
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 the long run, be detrimental for them not only
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financially
, but
also
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psychologically
.
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