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Write an essay of at least 250 words to describe an actor/ actress you like most

#actor #actress
In 2014, my aunt asked me to go out to the cinema to watch a new movie
which
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named “ Maleficent “. Among the cast, an actress who played the part of
princess
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 Aurora was impressed me a lot. After having come home, I immediately searched for
the
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information
of
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about
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this
 beautiful actress. Her name is
Elle
 Fanning.
Elle
’s appearance is an answer
for
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 the question
why
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of why
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 she is so popular. Her body shape is perfectly fit, she is long-legged and skinny. She has a round face with
puffy
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 rosy cheek, sparkling big blue eyes,
straight
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 nose and thin lips. There is always a bright smile
in
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on
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Elle
’s face, which made her face more radiant. She has gorgeous wavy blond hair which
match
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with
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her elegant dresses.
Beside
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 her stunning appearance,
Elle
 has a great personality that
i
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 like her most. She is sociable, as well as being cheerful. She can easily make friends with other actors and actresses.
Moreover
, she
is try
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 to get on well with her fans. She
is really concentrate
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in
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 details, she wants everything to be perfect. She always tries her best in every
scenes
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 in the movie, even in small scenes, that
why
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is why
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 she has a reputation and become very famous in her twenties. Her optimistic attitude always
make
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 everybody around her think positively. One time, I saw her play with a kitten at filming. Her kindness almost
melt
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 my heart. To me,
Elle
 Fanning is a person who is not only beautiful, gorgeous but
also
 determined, hard-working and talented. I have never seen anybody else who
manage
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 to look beautiful and professional for the cameras like
Elle
 did. Her characteristics and reputation is the thing that I have to remind myself so that I can be
such
 a successful person like her. I admire her talent and her efforts more than
other actress
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another actress
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 I have known.
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