Today's teenagers have more stressful lives than previous generations. Discuss this view and give your own opinion?

Nowadays, the youth is suffering from a far-greater challenging life than their
predeccessors
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predecessors
. Throughout
this
essay, I will discuss
this
viewpoint and present my opinion on the same.
Firstly
, I will elaborate, how
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emerging technology and social media has contributed to
this
trend and
secondly
, I will explain the changes in the education system and the ways to acquire knowledge
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added to the cause. The
last
50 years
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witnessed the greatest developments in the area of computer science and information technology. With the emergence of social media platforms
such
as Facebook, Twitter and Instant messaging apps
such
as WhatsApp and Instagram,
people
around the world
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come under one umbrella.
However
, the data collected from various research papers indicate that an average adult spends around 7-hours daily on their mobile phones.
This
has led to the formation of
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addictive behaviour and
people
tend to feel anxious and depressed
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if deprived of the internet and social media applications.
For instance
, a study conducted by the Indian Institute of Science
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concluded that the average
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was much higher in
people
using smartphones as compared to
people
not using them.
As a result
, teenagers are immensely growing addicted to the virtual world and validation, offered by the various
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platforms.
People
in the past were
heavely
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heavily
dependent on
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textbooks
and scriptures in their pursuit
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knowledge.
However
, the scenario was completely changed today.
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system has entirely become digitised, with the introduction of platforms
such
as Youtube, Udemy, Udacity etc.
On the other hand
,
this
trend has resulted in
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increased competition between students and
consequently
, a surge in parental pressure to attain better grades. As of result of
this
, children are developing mental and psychological issues,
further
adding to their stressful lives.
In addition
to that, many countries don't have an ideal approach to tackle mental issues. A developing country like India
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doesn't give the required attention and importance to mental health, resulting in
people
suffering from it, becoming more and more
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. In conclusion, the current generation is plagued by various issues and leads a tough life as compared to the
people
in our past. According to
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, parents should be offering the
neccessary
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necessary
support to their children to tackle
this
situation and the government should bring in reformations to educate the masses about the importance of psychological well-being.
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