New Technology and ways of buying and selling are transforming the lives of consumers. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Nowadays,
people
consumption behaviour has changed by new
technology
that you can buy and sell on the
internet
.
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this
statement and I will give some of
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of a new style of buying and selling. One of the benefits of buying and selling on online platforms, you may get a better
price
and you can sell your product at a good
price
too.
For example
, if you would like to buy something on the
internet
you can compare the
price
between a lot of websites,
Moreover
online shopping always has promotions to persuade buyers who like to shop with the sales
price
.
As a result
,
This
will be good for saving costs and a lot of products that you can buy by touching the mobile screen or computer ,
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another advantage of buying goods online and selling goods is easier than shopping mall and market that you have to go outside to find something you need but maybe you come back home with an empty hand,
For instance
, you can buy products from the
internet
anywhere and any time you need,
such
as while you work or take a break, just a short time it takes,
furthermore
, it not just buying and selling in our country we can buy everything around the world,
such
as in the store it ran out of the product now in trend and you can't find, so
this
is will be a problem if we don't have new
technology
to connect the world, everything that not available in stock but it might available somewhere in our world. In ,contrast if you have your own product and posted on the
internet
may be a buyer from another country will see your goods and buy
it
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everything has change and
technology
was build to help
people
to get easier life. To sum up, consumer life has rapidly changed after
technology
come into their lives, and some
people
think it's good for them and some
people
think
this
will give them some drawbacks. Someday in the future
technology
will replace many industries not only the shopping industry.
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