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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Different
people
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 have different problems in their lives and everyone has their own ways to tackle those problems. While some
people
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 chose to accept their awful situations,
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 as low income,
others
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 try their best to achieve what they deserve. In
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To begin
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 with, some
people
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 decide to stay in an awful
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 because they are scared of hard work and don'
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 want to live in their comfort zone. They give up on various opportunities just because they don'
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 want to leave their safe bubble.
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, one of my co-workers hate doing night shifts jobs, but he neither wants to talks about
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 with his supervisor nor switch his jobs as that requires extra effort and he has to sit through various job interviews and study for exams.
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 would do nothing, except complaining about their current
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.
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, some
people
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 do whatever they can to improve their current
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 and get what they deserve. They believe in their own hard work and don'
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 want to depend on
others
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.
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, they don'
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 want to blame
others
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 for their situations and they don'
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 want to regret in their future for not trying to get what they deserve.
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, my friend's father wanted him to become a doctor,
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 he was interested in pursuing his passion of becoming a wildlife photographer. He went against all odds and fought for his passion and was able to convince his father.
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, he is now one of the best photographers out there and his father is satisfied with him. To conclude, some
people
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 are scared of working hard and improve their lives, they accept their rough
situation
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 , while
others
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 face their problems head-on and fight to improve their conditions. In my opinion, the latter one has a better perspective as they depend on themselves rather than on someone else or fate.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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