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Nowadays the differences between countries are becoming less evident because people follow the same media. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is well known that in the age of globalization, which we live in since the technology developed,
people
 from all over the world are used to following the same trend, technology and even watching the same television program and movies. As a consequence, we have some advantages and disadvantages: while some countries are losing their own culture and the population became materialistic, others are developing the communication skills and enjoy the opportunity to try different experiences. On the one hand, one of the major damage of globalization world is caused by the advertisements of most famous brands and the television program, which unconsciously try to encourage
people
 to purchase goods they do not need.
In addition
,
people
 are willing to buy products from international brands even though its cost a bit more
as a result
 the national commerce is harmed.
Furthermore
, because of social networks and cinema young
people
 are losing their own culture,
for instance
, here in Brazil is not common to celebrate the Halloween party, but for us is traditional to celebrate the June festivals.
However
, in the
last
 ,decade
people
 are trying to change that. There are an increase in Halloween parties and a decrease in Saint John celebrations.
On the other hand
, the outweigh of sharing the same media is notorious. To start with the ability to learn languages and understand different cultures is easier if we compare it with the previous generations.
For example
, on the YouTube platform we can see videos with a huge different content we cannot only listen to foreign music but
also
, we can learn about other lifestyles.
Moreover
, the well-known food brands
for instance
 Starbucks, KFC, Pizza Hut and others have branches all over the world,
thus
 we can try different types of foods. In conclusion, after thorough analysis on
this
 subject, we can understand that
although
 there are some negative sides to share media, I believe that the advantages of
this
 issue outweigh the disadvantages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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