Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

In the past, authentic
food
and clothes were limited by the country of origin,
however
, in the
last
decades
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the situation has changed dramatically. There are both negative and positive aspects associated with
this
development,
however
, I tend to believe that the advantages take precedence over the drawbacks. First of all, I must admit that countries are losing their identity. The fact that nowadays
people
wear the same clothes and eat the same
food
prevents nations from being unique, as they were in the past.
Consequently
, it may lead to
loss
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of national individuality.
However
, the fact that now
people
do not need to be at home to feel at home cannot be overestimated.
Food
can be a markable example. Many
people
can enjoy the cuisine they had been
rose
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on during their
traveling
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travelling
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in the other part of the world. I always
looking
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for Russian
food
during my vacations and it
became
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not hard to find a good Russian restaurant in Europe.
In addition
, textile production has become international. Many brands open their shops in different countries, so
traveling
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for shopping purposes has become very popular.
For example
, I live in Israel and my
favorite
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brand is Zara, which is expensive.
However
, it can be found in
Spain
.
Moreover
, in
Spain
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Spain,
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the same item,
t-shirt
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for
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example, will cost much less, so
people
from Israel travel to
Spain
for shopping. On top
on
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that, when buying in
Spain
, Israel’s citizens will enjoy
tax free
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from
certain
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amount, which is very beneficial.
To conclude
,
although
there are a few negative aspects that relate to
affordability
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the affordability
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of different products worldwide, there are
plethora
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a plethora
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of benefits, that make me consider it
as
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a positive development.
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  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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