Young people have attitude and ideas different from that of their parents and grandparents. How do these attitudes differ between young people and their parents and grandparents? In your opinion, do you think it would cause problems?

Over the past few decades, our generation gap has increased exponentially due to paradigm
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in culture and after
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of technological advancement. It has
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impact on
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process of teenagers which has created differences with
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generation.
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impact. On one hand, teens nowadays are breaking
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ceiling and at
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young age becoming
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entrepreneur
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, Oyo CEO is one of the youngest
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at the age
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and demonstrated exceptional leadership skills. While
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can be considered as a positive change in mindset and outlook which may not have
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during older days as adults usually follow the herd mentality of growing organically in
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world. On on other hand, if we discuss
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emotional intelligence where our teenagers mostly
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they tend to rebel with
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value system.
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generations which is resulting in breakups among couples, failed marriages and broken families. These social problems
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to the upbringing of kids during
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their
tender age.
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, in
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divorce is very common and
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teenagers
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own as early as 15. As per
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brought up in
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in poor educational outcomes. In my opinion, we should learn older generations about
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and values of being a great human and
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our thought with them.
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we should not ignore
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their
suggestions and try to follow
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this
advice.
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, we try to make them understand our viewpoint in trying things in a new way and work together with them to create a new world.
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