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Some people believe that it is wrong to keep animals in zoo while others think that zoo are both entertainment and fun, discuss both the views and give Ur opinions.

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In recent years, there is an ongoing debate whether keeping
animals
 in the
zoo
 is wrong or wrong. In
this
 essay, I will carefully examine to support my opinion on the above subject. As
a
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 animal lover myself, I truly believe caging
animals
 for entertainment purposes is strictly not right. They need their freedom too. Nowadays,
zoo
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 have become
a
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very popular tourist
spots
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 in most
of
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the
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countries. The intention is purely to make money out of it. In most of the
zoo
, the
animals
 are not been taken care properly.
For example
, The
Zoo
 Negara in Kuala Lumpur is not well maintained. As we could see, most of the
animals
 are looking sad. As a
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result
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 we are losing many rare
animals
 life. We could save the dying
zoo
 by investing more funds to feed and create
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 environment which is appropriate for each
animals
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 living there. If we fail to give them that, we might just leave them to
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nature. Where they belong.
However
, there are some opponents
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 watching the animal in the cage can entertain them and
its
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 fun to watch. Children's love visiting zoos and they tend to gain a lot of knowledge and learn about
animals
.
In addition
, zoos will help to spur the tourism industry in every country.
For example
,
orangutan
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an orangutan
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 is one of the attractions in Sabah. In conclusion, there are pros and cons to keep
animals
 in the
zoo
. As a vegan, I would not harm any living things. I believe animal belongs to the nature.
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