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Some people say that economic growth is the only way to end hunger and poverty, while others say that economic growth is damaging the environment so it must be stopped. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #growth #hunger #poverty #environment
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The industrial revolution has been instrumental in improving the quality of life for a large section of the world population. But it has not been able to catch up with the ever-increasing population that has more than doubled in the
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 we will discuss specifically how
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 of growth aspirations of nations deprives its citizens of
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 to feed itself and how too much of it causes environmental impact for the
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 generation.
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 with, we should understand that the immediate solution to the hunger problem is by alleviating people from their poverty.
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 can be done by creating employment opportunities through the introduction of free-market policies by the government which can help incubate new businesses and
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 existing businesses to thrive. It is clearly a win-win situation all around because it is an organic way to solve a systemic problem.
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 will mean acquiring land through deforestation and creating new water systems by building dams.
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 would create employment opportunities for the local people, it will
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 affect the environment because the flora and fauna will be completely destroyed. The entire ecosystem that depended on them will
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future generations and subjecting them to unknown challenges. Today's generation has to make sure the economy continues to grow
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 that earning opportunities are available for everyone. But at the same time, it
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 has to ensure that investments are made in inventing technology that will reduce dependencies on natural resources which cannot be replenished as fast as we consume them.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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