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Manypeople believe that the human society has into a throw-away society, which is filled with plastic bags and rubbish. What are the causes and solutions?

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It is a human
tendancy
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tendency
 to throw out the things after usage especially polythene and rubbish.
Hence
 , due to
this
 development human society
known
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 as
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throw-away
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throw
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 away society .
This
 essay will discuss the major cause which is
lack
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 of
disposing
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knowledge
 along with
solution
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a solution
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 the prominent one is government action that helps to mitigate
this
 problem . Commencing with the principle reason, as in some societies
people
 do not have
knowledge
 about
disposing
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ofdisposing
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 methods they put
variety
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a variety
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 of
garbage
 in one type of dustbin .
For example
 , it is generally seen that
people
 in
rural
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the rural
a rural
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area
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 always
disposed
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ofdisposed
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 all
type
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types
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 of
garbage
 in one place whether it is household
garbage
 or plastic products because they do not have proper
knowledge
 about the impacts and
disposing
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criterias
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criteria
, Thereby ,
people
 freely dispose
everything
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of everything
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 before concerning its reuses. Turning to the possible solutions,
government
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 initiative helps to eradicate
this
 problem by making some
rule
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rules
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 and regulations as it governance duty to aware
those
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of those
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 who have no information regarding
disposing
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ofdisposing
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 methods to put rubbish and plastic products in different dustbins so ,
this
 material is used in a productive manner .
For instance
 ,
municipal
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the municipal
a municipal
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 corporation
have
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 to organise some campus in
remote
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 area to aware the individuals of
this
 area to use different dustbins for different purposes as it
help
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 to reduce the
garbage
 and maintain
healthy
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a healthy
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 environment.
Hence
 , it is
sole
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 responsibility of the officials to
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create
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creat
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create
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safe
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a safe
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 atmosphere by
awaring
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awarding
people
 . In conclusion , it can be said that
garbage
 is increased up to great extent because of the
people
habbits
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habits
 of throwing ill-mannerly that can be solved only by putting some efforts to gave
knowledge
 to unaware once .
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