There are many benefits to a good education. Therefore, a university education should be offered to all students, not just students with good high school grades. Do you agree or disagree?

It is believed that
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tertiary
education
should be free for all
students
because it
nutures
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nurtures
their future opportunities, in terms of job searching, qualifications, and so on.
Although
it sounds perfect, I disagree with the statement
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because
of some downsides
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. I will
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explain the reasons in the following paragraph.
To begin
with, the funds invested
on
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free tertiary
education
could be used for other imminent issues in society. To be
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specific
, there are many problems
such
as diseases and poverty that we have to solve immediately.
Therefore
, in order to alleviate the issues, the government needs sufficient money to deal with the problems constantly and provide
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to the people, which play important roles in bettering the situation.
Thus
, allocating funds to
the
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free
education
is regarded as wasting resources.
Moreover
, when
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university
education
become
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free, it will bring out unsatisfactory achievements in
study
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. In detail, there are some
students
who are not willing to
study
further
or not interested in the major they
study
,
however
, they just keep it up because it is free.
For example
, a student who gets to university for free with poor grades would likely
to
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be absent the school and get bad results.
Therefore
,
this
mindset will cause irresponsibility
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their
study
so that their level of performance will be decreased. In
this
respect, making tertiary
education
free for everyone is not
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investment
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society. In conclusion, it is undeniable that university
education
provides numerous opportunities for
students
,
however
, making it free for all
students
will bring out downsides
on
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society.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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