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When cars and cyclists use the same roads, there are often problems. Why is this the case? What are the solutions?

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Cars
 and
cyclists
 are both essential and often used as
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mode
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 of transportation nowadays.
This
 essay will discuss two main causes and possible solutions. On the one hand,
cyclists
 are prone to accidents most of the time when they used roads
same
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 as
cars
,
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 because given that bicycles are lighter than
cars
 there is a tendency they will be out of balance when fast
cars
past
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 through them.
Next
, during traffic
jams
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cyclists
 intended to overtake
to
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narrow spaces between
cars
 that sometimes they never noticed.
This
 way, a lot of
cyclists
 end up having an accident
in
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 the road because of
cars
. Most drivers
also
 did not
noticed
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 the bicycles
ih
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in
 their front that's why
accident
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 happen.
On the other hand
, the possible solution is to share the road and create a space exclusive for
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a bicycle
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bicycle
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. With
this
, we can avoid
accident
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 to happen.
In addition
, the cyclist and car drivers should educate themselves to be responsible enough be aware on their surrounding at all times. Pandemic
give
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 us a lot of challenges. Most people lost their earnings that's why the possible solution to them to go for work is to use
bicycle
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 because they can
saved
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 money for gas. To conclude, it is possible for
cars
 and
cyclist
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cyclists
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 to share the same roads as long as they are independent with their actions. We only live once. We need to value our lives because a lot of our families are waiting for us to come home safe.
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