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Dear Sir or Madam, I have recently read an article in your latest travel magazine which has some wrong information about
Jaipur
city
. It states that
Jaipur
does not have many places to visit and is not recommended for tourism.
However
,
Jaipur
city
is actually full of tourist places. There are lots of forts and monuments. The markets are huge and full of ethnic dresses, footwear and jewellery. Foreigners love to visit Jaipurtas they experience a warm welcome from the locals. I think it's significantly important for me to tell you that your magazine has mentioned some really incorrect facts about the
city
, and would request you to kindly correct it, so that people don't get ill- information about the place. Most of the people in the
city
earn their bread and butter
by
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the tourists and the guests who come to see the beauty of
Jaipur
and spend money in hotels, shopping and visiting different places. I would suggest you
to
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remove that article from your magazine for the
next
set
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so that it doesn’t get printed again in the new set of magazines. Let any of your good reporters visit that place and experience it themselves and write a new article on
Jaipur
City
and print again. I hope
this
letter will change your mind and you will do the needful. Thank You! Yours Faithfully! Jyoti
Buttan
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