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Nowadays many countries have cosmopolitan cities with people from all over the world. How can the government ensure that all these people can live together harmoniously?

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Now in the modern epoch, in the whole
world
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,world
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people
 are working and studying in the same country with different nations. To live these
people
 in harmony the government has some responsibility to take action. I will explain some of these actions in the following paragraphs.
To begin
 with, the government has to make a law, which guarantees the right of everyone to profess and
practice
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 his/her
religion
 freely. From
this
, the rules protect religious freedom, which means every person can perform their religious duties and no one has the right to oppose or ridicule another
religion
.
For instance
, in Canada with different religious groups, from catholic to no
religion
, anyone is free to practice their
religion
 and can publish his
religion
 as long as
such
 activities do not affect public order, public health or morality.
Therefore
, to have a harmonious society, it must have a constitution to protect
people
 from religious conflicts.
In addition
, the free language classes should be held by the administration. So that, immigrants can live there with no difficulty and
also
 they can have a strong social relationship with making a friend circle with natives.
For example
, France is a country that provided free language courses for immigrants (adults and children) to make harmony in society, to help them communicate and integrate easily with natives.
Thus
, authority makes integrate community with making unit linguistic state To conclude,
although
 understanding others is a vital factor to living harmoniously, the authority should take some laws in the way of
this
 understanding for those
people
 who can not behave responsibly.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cosmopolitan
  • inclusive policies
  • cultural exchange
  • integration
  • community centers
  • anti-discrimination
  • awareness campaigns
  • support systems
  • diversity
  • equal opportunities
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