It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
It is widely believed that talents are what
the
nature gives since they were born Correct article usage
apply
such
as becoming a good sports player or musician. Whereas, some people
argue that one can be taught and develop himself or herself to be excel in any sport or music. In the following paragraphs, both of these viewpoints will be examined in detail before a conclusion is reached.
It is true to say that some children are born with certain talents. For example
, Miss Kim, a young Korean musician having more than five million followers on the YouTube channel, sings songs with her beautiful voice since she was five years old. Her parents announced that Kim has never been attend
a music class, but she learnt how to sing by herself. Change the verb form
attending
attended
Consequently
, Korean praised that she was born with a natural gift. Another good example is that Tiger Wood, a professional golf player, won the world champion since he was young. He has all necessary
Correct article usage
the necessary
skills
for being an athlete.
In contrast
, some people
believe that every one
can develop his or her Replace the word
everyone
skills
. Having gifted but lacking of
practice may reduce his or her abilities, while other Remove the preposition
apply
people
who put their efforts to develop their skills
can become expert
in the particular area. A good example is that a kick-boxing player from a small province in Thailand, lacking Fix the agreement mistake
experts
of
good facilities and a trainer. Remove the preposition
apply
Nevertheless
, he dedicated himself for
Change preposition
to
practicing
more than six hours every day. Change the spelling
practising
As a result
, he won the Olympics Games in Tokyo,2020. He said that he had been kicked so many times and was the loser when he was a teenager. However
, he can overcome any obstacles because of his determine
and discipline.
In conclusion, both talents and efforts play a vital role to become an expert in any area. From my perspective, Replace the word
determination
people
should develop and maintain their skills
to unleash their capabilities.Submitted by kanokwann.joy on
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