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some people think that social media platforms are useful for business and making new friends, while others think that such websites are harmful. discuss the advantages and disadvantages of social media.com

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 are adopting new strategies to expand their businesses and interact with
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. One of the most famous platforms among groups of individuals is social media, which is easy to handle and comes with several other benefits but some oppose and argue that it has a number of disadvantages. Admittedly, networking websites are a boon for many companies, because of
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 of usage and promoting their brands. Any person who knows how to appliance mobile phones can operate them, and can do promotions on their own without any assistance.
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, on Instagram, human beings can post advertisements on their public account and explain to viewers about their products in a short video.
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, it is no longer difficult to make new friends, because just a click to request
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 to be their close ones is enough on sites like Facebook and Twitter.
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 stays tuned with
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 even if they are a thousand miles away from each other.
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, what is half full for some, may appear half empty to
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 them, it is the cause behind online scams, as hackers gather data from accounts and operate it to get money from the banks.
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, artificial intelligence is becoming advanced and complicated and photographs and videos are edited by the users to blackmail many
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.
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, it is difficult to distinguish fake users and companies, because no one can be judged from their profiles as chiselers upload
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' data on their pages. To put it in a nutshell, using various minisites is an advantage for
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 if it is used by being aware of scammers. These come with abundant merits
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 as communicating with unknowns but
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 its demerits to recognise who is real.In
this
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 technological era,
people
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 are adopting new strategies to expand their businesses and interact with
others
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. One of the most famous platforms among groups of individuals is social media, which is easy to handle and comes with several other benefits but some oppose and argue that it has a number of disadvantages.

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To strengthen your introduction, try to clearly state your opinion about social media at the end of the paragraph. This helps set the stage for your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that tells the reader what the paragraph will discuss. This improves clarity.
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Include more specific examples to support your points, especially for the disadvantages. This will help make your argument stronger.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words (e.g., 'however', 'furthermore', 'in addition') to improve flow between sentences and ideas. This enhances coherence.
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You have recognized both sides of the argument well, which shows a good understanding of the topic.
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Your examples, like using Instagram for advertising, are quite relevant and add value to your points.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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