Nowadays the way many people intact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology has affected the type of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?

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telecommunication
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technology has changed the way we interact with each
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to
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between
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of
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to be impossible before. In a professional way, communication is fatal. The companies can reduce the
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to more profit earning.
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communication may
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globalize
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crisis is a good example of why
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terrible thing together.
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a drawback. The amount of time
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in digital social decreases the period we use with our surrounding
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area,
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particularly
, grandparents.
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in less understanding between the generation. Another effect to consider is the
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boundnary
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access network. More
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psychological
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social media has many positive
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in daily life, what is too much will always bring
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