Unmanned vehicles will become more and more popular in the future. Passengers travelling inside these robot cars will be only human. Do you think the benefits of these surpass the drawbacks? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Unmanned
vehicles
will become more and more popular in the future.Passengers inside these robot cars will be only
human
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.So
i
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think the benefits of these surpass the drawbacks. As you know,humans are
also
an important reason for the occurrence of
traffic
accidents. Sense when participating in
traffic
of each driver is extremely necessary,but there are many drivers who do not care about it,lead to serious
traffic
accidents.So driverless
car
is a great innovation helps each country to reduce the number of accidents.When
people
in an unmanned vehicle,they are just a passenger so do not worry about when the accident happened For many
people
, parking is
such
a nightmare.If you have a driverless
car
,you do not have to worry about
this
problem.The system in a
car
will use technology to park the
car
safely with human assistance.It is very helpful for many drivers.
Besides
that, unmanned
vehicles
also
help to reduce
traffic
jams, air pollution.Not only that,
this
car
improves the ability of
people
with disabilities to participate in
traffic
and help
people
choose the fastest way. In spite of
many
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benefits of unmanned
vehicles
, these
vehicles
are just machines so they can not make decisions like
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human
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.And in my
opinion
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it takes a long time to be able to use
this
vehicle.
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