Some people believe that women should stay at home and should take care of children, while others believe that women should work. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

These days,

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women

women's

womens

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play

the

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more vital role in the part of businesses than in the past, which

were

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mainly responsible for housework and taking

care

of pupils. Some people allege all of

women's

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the women's

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responsibility is raising

children

, whereas others think that

women

can work outside, and find

incomes

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income

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. In

this

essay, I will explore the advantages of both views and provide my perspective, why

women

should only focus on taking

care

of

children

. Being a mother and raising their

kids

are difficult tasks, and

fulltime

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job

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jobs

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because

children

need special

care

from their

parent

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parents

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, especially

baby

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babies

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aged less than a year. Babies in

this

stage always cry over the entire night.

Therefore

, If the mother is a businesswoman, she will be

exhuasted

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exhausted

due to

sleepless

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.

Moreover

,

children

will be deserved

a

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proper

care

from their mom, which is significantly different from

babysisters

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babysitters

baby sisters

. For

this

reason, the family can save

massive

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amount of money to hire

babysisters

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babysitters

baby sisters

and the

kids

will be taken

care

by

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love from mom.

In

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the other hand, working

women

also

provide some benefits including gaining more family income. Obviously,

with

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double family incomes from a man and a woman can provide the better well-being of

family

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and their

kids

. They can afford the expensive educational fee for prestigious international schools or even

oversea

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overseas

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universities. As

the

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results

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result

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, in the future, their

children

have better

opportunity

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opportunities

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to be recruited

in

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apply

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the

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better companies. In conclusion,

although

the family which have

working

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a working

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woman

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women

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can provide higher income to the family and can bring about the better opportunity for their

kids

in

term

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of education, the benefits of having

women only

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women-only

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focusing on raising

kid

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kids

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outnumber the advantages of those working outside because they can spend the quality time with their pupils and make them grow up with love.