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Recently, abortion increases rapidly and becomes a controversial topic. Some people suppose that abortion should be legal while others are against it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, due to a rapid increase in ,abortions it became a controversial topic. While some people argue that
abortion
 should be illegal , other's believe that it should be legal. I personally reckon to abort once children should be lawful , hearby , I am going to shed light on both views in the following passages. On the face of the statement, there are multiple factors to support that
abortion
 should be made legal out of which I'm going to list two main reasons.
Firstly
, What if the parents are not economically stable? Can they raise their newborn baby? these questions need to be addressed.
For instance
, if we take India
although
 it is the economy is growing, poverty is still a major challenge. Where in
this
 case there will a lot of families who cannot afford a newborn. In
this
 ,scenario if they have the right to abort
then
 they will take the right step.
Secondly
, there will be a few household's where in which they are not ready for a baby and want to spend time travelling. So, in
this
 current
situation
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 it will be wise to give full authority to keep the child or not.
This
 will be possible only if it is lawful. To elaborate, If we make
abortion
 legal
then
 it's the parent call whether to keep the baby or not.
In Contrast
, a few people think differently due to the following reasons.
First
 and foremost, earlier most of them used to abort after knowing that the child that they are carrying is a female.
However
,
this
 can be reduced by not allowing to reveal the gender before the delivery. As
this
 can be eradicated by other means
abortion
 should be legal. To summarize and give my opinion, I would say that making
abortion
 legal is the most ideal way to deal with
this
 situation. In the big picture,
this
 would make everyone happy.
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