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In some societies it is increasingly common to try to achieve good health and fitness through physically demanding sports, special diets, or preventative medicine -conventional or alternative. Some people, however, believe that the best way to stay fit and healthy is simply to lead a normal life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Some believed that
people
 nowadays should live a normal life
instead
 of achieving good
health
 and
fitness
 through physically demanding sports, a special diet, or preventative medicine. I partly disagree with
this
 opinion
To begin
 with, there is no doubt that in the booming economies that
people
 don’t have time for doing physical activities and depend on enhanced medical.
This
 makes them think that achieving good
health
 is not necessary as doing other activities.
However
,
this
 is an unconvincing reason and an excuse for lazy
people
 don't want to do
excersise
Correct your spelling
exercise
.
People
 have been born in different physical and
people
 who are not physically fit, they ought to have a balanced diet and suitable exercise, it is unable for any medician can solve
this
 problem. In some cases, doing
fitness
 not only help you
having
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 a fit body, but it
also
 supports your mental, getting a better spirit. Having a well-being status would increase the ratings of happiness.
In addition
, achieving good
health
 and
fitness
 would support your resistance which to some extent prevent some disease. The greatest example of
this
 is The COVID-19 pandemic which has caused significant disruptions in our lives.
Also
, we are living in an era of industrial development, owing to which, the environment is highly contaminated and polluted.
Therefore
, we need to maintain our
fitness
 unless it would have some bad consequences in the near future. In conclusion, to lead a happy, healthy and prosperous life, everyone should ponder on
health
 issues as prevention is better than cure.
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