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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given maps depict how the transit accessibility of a
city
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 hospital has altered from 2007 to 2010.
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, the three-year period saw changes
to
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the
to the
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road
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 layout. The salient features of
this
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 alteration are the addition of two roundabouts, public parking facilities and a
bus
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 station.
According to
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 the map of 2010, access to the
city
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 hospital
were
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 still via the same roads, namely
City
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Road
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, Hospital
Road
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 and Ring
Road
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;
however
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, by 2010, two roundabouts had been built at the junctions shown in the map of 2007, which necessitated the removal of
bus
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 stops located on
the
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both sides of Hospital
Road
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.
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 of the demolition of those
bus
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 stops, a
bus
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 station was erected on the
west-side
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west side
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 of Hospital
Road
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, with access to
this
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 being through (
the
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)both roundabouts. The
further
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 additional feature is the car park on the
right-hand
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right hand
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 of the Hospital
Road
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, which was for both public and the
city
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 hospital’s workforce, was separated into two different car parks for each of them, with the one for
public
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 being moved to the right of the
city
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 hospital, and with the other one remained in the same place.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, road, bus with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic flow
  • road access
  • ring road
  • bus stops
  • bus station
  • congestion
  • parking facilities
  • pedestrian crossings
  • vehicular flow
  • organizational structure
  • accessibility
  • enhancements
  • configuration
  • dedicated
  • diverting traffic
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